Thursday, November 29, 2012

Ending Twilight

So this is a poem I wrote during a writing workshop I took at school. It's a little dark, but oh well (excuse the depressing-ness of the poem). Constructive criticism would be appreciated.


Now is the season
for faith to break.
Now is the season
for one to wait.
Light from a window
makes shadows a like.
All minds are kept quiet
until twilight.

Now is the season
for trust to dispair.
Now is the season
for souls to tear.
The desert is freezing.
She walks alone,
Reflections don't match
a soft screaming tone.

Now is the season
for smiles to lie.
Now is the season
for cuts to dry.
Chimes cut through the mist
with a razor-sharp tune.
She waits, she waits.
It will all end soon.

1 comment:

  1. Okay...I'm not a very good constructive criticizer, but fortunately for you I'm also not a good criticizer in general.

    The poem was really good. Also incredibly dark. I'm not sure how to handle it. But, twas quite good.

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